blind, bound in darkness
i still see your deceit
deaf, trapped by silence
i still hear your lies
because of you we die
tear the flesh and shatter the bones
break the heart and rip out the soul
leaving nothing but a gaping hole
destroy the spirit and crush the will
feast on the blood till you've had your fill
nothing now is left, nothing but the beast
calling out only silence
none of you can hear her
see this pain
hear these cries
of course not
all of you have forgotten
wandering lost and alone
can anyone help her
why do you all just pass her by
holding out her hand
none of you look her way
none of you hear what she says
by all she once was known
for none were innocent or sweeter
but now tears flood her eyes
torn apart by your deceit and lies
still moving forward she faces another day
lost and alone, used and forgotten
COMMENTS
its got a deep meaning . Really nice
I agree.... it has a very eep meaning and is heart wrenching....
Very nice and can relate to this poem
yeah... i really like this poem babe
a monster now bears the crown
while in a red river we all drown
reach out your hand
grasping for nothing
can you hear them crying
while the monster is rejoicing
bathing in tears
thriving off our fears
dying slowly for a thousand years
we bow our heads in shame
burning to ashes, so afraid to die
when nobody knows our name
alone he wanders
lonely and free
bleeding slowly
his heart is stone
alone he wanders
dying in pain
slowly going insane
his heart is no longer his own
come to me my fallen angel
let me hold you in my arms
fly to me on jet black wings
let me be the one to save you
and forever of our love we will sing
eternal darkness, swallowing me
bound by chains, never free
i've never seen, the light of day
no one ever listens, to what i say
now stand back and enjoy the show
i'll put everything you've seen to shame
this is the end of all you know
welcome to my wonderful game
destroying love, devouring hate
obliterating happiness, ravaging anger
nothing will remain, within my sight
but fear not children, its only fate
watch the fire spread, further and further
watch it all fade away in burning light
can you see me now, as i burn it all
COMMENTS
wow this is really good. very good and to the point.
great pen!
strip the flesh from the bone
your soul you no longer own
now open your eyes
see the end of days
as the sun's last light
slowly fades away
watch now as everything burns
for only your freedom do you yearn
this all is happening because of your lies
see it now as the lightning crashes
filling the darkness with brilliant light
nothing is left but the ashes
the terrible blaze cosumes all
to me, even the mightiest of kings
will soon fall
the smell of death soon fills the air
as all the world falls
into my oh so simple snare
for no one but yourselves do you care
and so the same fate
you all will share
as i raise my head
and ignite the flame
it matters not
who is to blame
as i spread my wings
the black fire spreads
of this dark day
you used to fearfully sing
now run you bastards
cower in fear
hide you hypocrites
the end is here
the dragon has risen
and it is your judgement day
COMMENTS
I find poetry to be more interesting when it isn't in first person. try using tighter sentence structure, like dropping words like and, the, ect. You do have a way with words but poems of too much length tend to bore readers and they won't finish a piece
I really like this one!! I have missed ur writing.
COMMENTS
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toxicbite23
12:53 Mar 19 2012
Really Awesome poem.
KindellFlames
04:47 Sep 03 2012
Hunny one of these days I will be as good as u. Love u sweetie miss u!!!