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Wow, only you can descibe that touch ..
Slippery slide into madness and joy, this is a really fun piece to read. I particularly like the way it rolls from my tongue. It is verbal nectar Jo, well done, truly.
For a second I was thinking rat, snake..then I just got lost in your words. But in a good way. :)
Excellent, fun poem. I have several scenes running through my head and all of them are just cute and fun. :)
This takes absolute brilliance to a completely new level. It teases and dances on the tongue, flickers a montage of rapidly changing images through the mind and leads with a playful giggle into the icy chill of the final phrase. Purely... simply... utterly brilliant! Fucking WOW!!
You know...how can I not write when I am so blessed by people like all of you. Thank you for the encouragement. You could never ever know how much it truly means to me.
Nice.
Just wow, I am lost for words. Your writing always lifts me:)
As always I am in awe of your writing, that's something considering how picky I am but you're that good.
Will you follow me?
I am the wind, calling your name with urgency
I have blinded you
I have littered broken glass in your path
Falling is the only certainty you may have
To want me is to bleed
To reach me is to breathe
One lock turns
One bolt slides
One door opens
Rag piles still where they slumber in doorways
The earth is drunk in the energy of this moment
Your moment
Never to come again
Will you follow me?
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Sightless, bleeding, broken... gasping, "yes".
Heh, seems you have a devoted follower Jo ;)
I liked this for its urgency and kind of primal seduction.
Beautiful.
Just try to lose me...
Always and forever.
take my breath away
you are magical
Like the Pied Piper with your whisperings I'm bewitched with the power in your words.
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BLOODLIFE
09:37 Jan 27 2009
I really, really wish you'd write more.
FallenPixie
19:05 Jan 27 2009
Your grammatical inclination has always and will always be stunning, my Dear :-)