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Painted Boxes

04:14 Apr 04 2008
Times Read: 887


Until you look about

out here

you may never know

just what colors

adorn your



when we seek farther

we leave our boxes

for bigger ones

some even have

glass sides



enforced cardboard

notional fortresses

shield us against

what we fear

beyond boxes


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cadrewolf
cadrewolf
00:10 Apr 22 2008

our boxes are our safe haven, for the concrete mazes of the world we call earth seem to spread like disease and corner us and trap us, for if we look inside our minds can we only escape.





Joli
Joli
00:55 Jun 04 2008

"enforced cardboard

notional fortresses

shield us against

what we fear

beyond boxes"



Brilliant and strong metaphor! This was my favorite part of this piece because it is so tightly written.





dabbler
dabbler
01:03 Jun 04 2008

Thank you both for your comments.





 

Sinister Mistress

03:55 Apr 04 2008
Times Read: 888


across from me she sits

chokes a butt

in her steady fingers

we exchange what could be

glances of amusement or

a study for observable regret

"He really deserved it."

the first thing she said

after a hours time

"I am so stoked,

that we where together."

some how all my

confusion and nausea

faded with her

sinister smile...

something or someone

has crossed her mind...

secretly I am relieved

that it was not me


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