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The Changing

16:18 Feb 16 2010
Times Read: 519


The snow so white and pure,

falls from the sky,

landing so softly on the ground.

Something so pure,

is tainted so easily,

as tears run down my face,

the blade is tight in my hand.

Slashing at something

and blood splattering everywhere.

Staining the untainted white.

As body parts of innocent hit the ground,

the snow falls and no one cares.

I raise my blade and continue,

just slashing and chopping,

as blood flying through the air.

My mind screams stop

and my body can't.

The snow falls harder,

as blood is everywhere,

body parts are slowly being buried.

The blade is raised one last time,

and I look down and see the faces.

I drop to my knees

as the blade sinks through my heart.

...

...

...

I wake up in a cold sweat.

sheets stained in blood.

It was just a dream,

it felt so real...

no it was real.

It might as well have been.

I look into a mirror.

Who was the person I see?

Who am I?

I throw the mirror in the wall,

the voices are getting stronger.

Over-throwing the balance.

In the pain, I scream out a name,

with reckless rage and power

flowing through my body,

I know what happened,

but I am no longer in control,

after the death of the innocents

that i have caused.

All I can do is watch in horror,

as the nightmare in me is unleashed.

As my eyes change and the emotions stop,

I have truly become a monster,

and can never turn back

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DarkSeductions
DarkSeductions
01:46 Feb 23 2010

i brought tears..beautiful.





 

Immortal Love

17:16 Feb 09 2010
Times Read: 534


On broken wings and dying hearts

and our love departs.

Above this thick fog of of doubt,

come a calming view without...

There are no streets

and only cold to greet

this lonely soul with a heart that doesn't beat

leaving this body without heat.

This body that has decomposed

with no hope that shows.

So just leave this body that is gone,

and just walk away at dawn.

As the seasons change

your thoughts turn strange.

As the dead leaves fall

you return to the body that is immortal.

Your heart is beating too much

as you find that the body is cold to the touch.

As a tear falls from your face,

as you get a cold embrace.

Your heart stops beating

and your life is fleeting.

The cold rain starts,

your heart starts to departs.

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On Broken Wings

22:59 Feb 03 2010
Times Read: 544


Fresh smoke is in the air,

and new blood has stained the ground,

the heart is beating in despair

with no hope being found.

A new line shows

and the eyes look away,

hope starts to decompose,

knowing there no way for it to stay for today.

A chain that was broken

again it has started,

with words that go unspoken,

on hearts that were uncharted.


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LadyRavynneSayuriLilith
LadyRavynneSayuriLilith
17:58 Feb 09 2010

This is very good.





TheSYSTEM
TheSYSTEM
12:54 Dec 07 2011

"This is very good."



^Meh, such a forced comment just for the sake of a commenting, comment.



-" knowing there (is) no way for it to stay today" -This would sound a bit better.



I think if you edit out the small un-needed things it would fit together better. Then your final piece would sound smoother. :)



Don't mind if I do it do you? You're usually good at this anyway. :P I can't type decently once half asleep and you've corrected me a few times. haha



"Fresh smoke in the air,

new blood has stained the ground.

Heart is beating in despair

with no hope being found.

A new line shows

the eyes look away,

hope starts to decompose,

knowing there is no way for it to stay today.

A chain that was broken

again it has started,

with words that go unspoken,

on hearts that were uncharted.
"








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