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The Suicide Soft Shoe

06:01 Aug 19 2010
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Can't look.

Still there.

His Bogart face

Oxidized

And flaking away

Like rust

Under chipped nails,

Worried along

From the bench

At my stop.

Still there.

She crouches

On a ledge and

I can't look, I tell you...

The sun

Bleaches teddy bears

And people.

Pray your shade trees,

Desert.

Battleships are just mountains.

Lonely things,

All.


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BLOODLIFE
BLOODLIFE
08:53 Aug 19 2010

Great work, fantastic punch. You really excel at discribing a feeling.



"The sun

Bleaches teddy bears

And people."



Perfect!








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