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"So what your saying is your that guys son?" I asked. "Yes I am that guys son and soon you'll be his daughter in law!" Vlad said to me happily. "But I don't even know you Vlad for all I know you could be a masked murder and I'll become your next victim." I said. "I can't hurt a fly let alone a human being. Now you have to get your strength up so drink it." Vlad says shyly. "So the man who is your father what's his name?" I say curiously. " His name? It's..." "Phoenix, that's my name. I'm terribly sorry for drinking that much out of you. I just couldn't help myself and you were fighting me so I had no choice." Phoenix said interrupting Vlad.

I wake up suddenly and can't move. "I'm stiff or am I tied up?" I think to myself. "Am surprised to see you awake after how much I drank from you Anastasia. If I were you I wouldn't try to move." The man says to me from the door as he leaves." Wait" I managed to say before he closes the door. "I'll be back with something for you to drink I promise. Since you are the one who will marry my son." He said before he closed the door. "I will marry someone?" I think to myself. A few minutes later the door starts to creak and a boy about my age comes in with a glass with red stuff in it and a straw. "Your even more beautiful up close than from a distance. I'm Vlad. Here drink up your need your strength for the transformation." Vlad says sweetly. "What transformation are you talking about Vlad?" I say quietly as he starts to untie my arms. "Father didn't tell you that we are getting married? Well you and me are going to be getting married tomorrow so we had to find you. But when we did you took off running so father went after you and you put up a fight so he had no choice but to drink your blood.

As I run though the forest I hear the foot steps getting closer. I'm out of breath but I can't stop running. "They are going to kill me!!!" I think to myself. Just then I trip over a tree branch and I fall to my knees. I look up and I think "There is a person standing right in front of me! If I scream I would surely be killed in an instant." "Miss you are bleeding, let me help you." The man said as he bent down to my level. "No I'm fine I can take care of myself." I shriek. "But you smell so good I can't help myself!" He says grabbing my wrist. "Let me go!" I yell and start kicking at him but he dodges all of my kicks. "Please don't kick me! Your going to ruin my meal." He says this as he bites into my wrist. I scream in pain and look at my arm that is now covered in blood. He pulls away and sighs "I want more." He says to me and reaches for my neck. I scream again and punches him in the throat. He lets me go and I try to take off but he gets up and pulls my arm that is bloody and I let out a sharp cry. He pulls me back and I fall into his arms. He bites my neck and starts to drink my blood again. Thinking "Is he going to kill me? What is he?" "Let me go!" I say weakly and I pass out.

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Morphilim
23:02 Feb 26 2016

Good story. Now, please don't take this the wrong way, I'm only trying to help. Remove a lot of your "I"s. For example:



The sentence, " I'm out of breath but I can't stop running." becomes " I'm out of breath, but can't stop running."



Another example would be, "Just then I trip over a tree branch and I fall to my knees." becomes, "Just then, I trip over a tree branch and fall to my knees."



Like I said, just trying to help the story flow more smoothly. :)

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Kathrine94
15:33 Apr 16 2016

Love it can't wait to read more!

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